This is working better, but you have too many colors. With white, black, red, and the paper color, you're up to 4 colors instead of 3. Can you think of a different solution for the tagline though? Conceptually, it's unclear why it's placed there. Also, I would try using "lining figures" instead of "old style" numbers. You should be able to find the lining numbers under Type > Glyphs in InDesign. I'm suggesting this because the 3417 sticks out on the bottom line because it sinks below the baseline.
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