You've done a good job reducing over the past week. Your layout is much cleaner and clearer. For your pictograms, the food sticks out a bit just because it has substantially more dark than the others. Could you incorporate more line into the clothing one (outline of a pocket perhaps?) and shrink the size of the shirt so there isn't so much white in the container? Since your design is so minimal, I would consider reducing your intro text. Really be concise and keep it personal. I think you need to somewhere indicate that the numbers your showing are dollars. For the back, I like the visual connection you're making with the brackets, but it's getting a little too busy. Maybe it's no longer as important for the viewer to see the individual $10 blocks. Could each transaction simply be a chunk (so the only division is between transactions rather than between $10 increments). Then you would only need one bracket to show that all of these transactions are with a certain method of payment. Let me know if that doesn't make sense.
Also, I think color could really add to this piece. Look at money (foreign and U.S.) for inspiration. Maybe something like this too? http://www.good.is/post/transparency-auditing-the-world-bank/
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